House of Night Marked What Could Have Been Different
Critiquing Chapter 1.
In the world of Zoey Redbird everything wasn't what she thought. But then a Vampyre tracker comes to her school marking her. She didn't have the support of her parents. So she drives to her grandmothers Lavender farm.
Zoey has supportive friends, and she fights the darks inside of her.
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Louise Blake-Michael (Risen Phoenix)
LouLou maintains a boundary between her professional endeavors and personal life. She wears many hats as an author, blogger, and content creator. In various projects, each one a testament to her dedication and passion for storytelling.
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Oooo, this was really intriguing! Excellent review!