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Dad set your paintings ablaze on a Thursday, piled in a heap of
rubble and ruin, his gruff tenor thick with tears as he struck the match. I was furious. With him, with you, with
everyone that refused to help. But mostly with myself as your soul-soaked canvases were all that kept us from freezing that night,
and I was glad for it. Horrified Relieved we had something to burn. Yet there in that battered hovel we claimed under the bridge,
memories of your laughter, your contagious joy floated away on soot and ash, and I–
I never felt more filthy.
Now nightmares plague me of a world in shades of gray and pitch. I
guess you took all the technicolor dreams with you.
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Comments (35)
G-O-R-G-E-O-U-S!!
Very impressive
Heather! Oh my gawd this poem is fire! No pun intended, it’s now one of my favorites. Top tier!
Congrats on your Top Story!
Really enjoyed the syntax.
Congrats on the TS.
My word, Hannah said it right - devestating. I love your use of language in this..feels more like a story than a poem...powerful, sad writing.Also love how it all ties in with the acrostic word. The pic is just one more gut-punch. congrats on Top Story for this one, Heather, fin.damn.
Congratulations on your top story.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
So much sadness everywhere. Such things we do to survive however painful. Colors will return with time. So will hope.
Heather this was gut-wrenching!! Absolutely amazing work here and congrats on Top Story!!
I enjoyed the Rhythm of your piece, a nice blend of anger, hopelessness, loss and love. Well done, but your pieces have been very sad lately. Congratulations
Very good
This is so heartbreaking and beautiful, Heather! Like others, I really love the last line. Congrats on the Top Story!
This has a great rhythm and is heartbreakingly sad. The last line about technicolor dreams is my favorite. Well done, and congrats on the top story.
This was a hard one to read...
Great acrostic--a whole novel inside!
Brilliant piece, Heather. Congratulations on Top Story! I'd quote the lines that most resonated but every word struck a chord. As a painter, I can only imagine how devastating that moment would be, and in different ways, for every person involved. Also have to say I'm blown away by the powerful use of strike-through. Masterful indeed! Wonderful acrostic!
This cuts deep into the soul. Intense from first line to last.
Devastating
Congrats!
Congrats on the top story. Funnily enough, I just finished reading David Mitchell's Utopia Avenue. In it, a key moment for one of the protagonists involves his (drunken, depressed, angry) father burning his guitar, records, etc to stop him becoming "a long-haired layabout". Similar scene, very different feel.
Creative, impressive, and Top Story!!! Loved it!!!
This definitely had such a unique feel and voice that felt so viscerally satisfying, angry and poignant
I love you poem and its original voice.