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Cold Comfort

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By Hannah MoorePublished 4 months ago Updated 4 months ago 1 min read
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Cold Comfort
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Maisie had been sick in the night, and again at breakfast. She didn't feel awful, just hollow, not quite real, but Mum said she would have to stay indoors.

Thomas had not been sick, and now he was outside with Mum. Maisie could watch them through the window from where she sat ignoring the TV. Thomas's green all-in-one looked funny against the white, and Mum seemed blocky, like an ambulant shrub. Maisie could see Mum laughing when Thomas threw a snowball at her, and she watched her creep up behind him and push a handful of snow down the back of his neck. Thomas turned cross and tearful and Mum crouched down and said something to him before they performed a symbolic hug, too wadded to really make contact.

Mum vanished from the window then, appearing inside a moment later. "Ok Mais?" Maisie nodded. She badly wanted to play in the snow, but she felt too feeble to say so. Mum went back outside.

Maisie may have fallen asleep, because then Thomas was there, holding the washing up bowl like he was waiting for her to be sick again, except in it there was a snowman, as tall as her big bear, with stick arms and a marble smile. Maisie started to cry, and Thomas looked alarmed. "You can break it, and build it again if you want?" he offered, and she nodded, reaching out a hand and pulling off it's arms, smiling wanly as the cold kissed her fingertips.

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Hannah Moore

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  • ROCK 4 months ago

    I really found this tender; well written Hannah!

  • Kenny Penn4 months ago

    Great story, Hannah! Loved little Thomas

  • D.K. Shepard4 months ago

    Delightful! Excellent scene setting and emotional build. The ending was precious.

  • L.C. Schäfer4 months ago

    Awww that was thoughtful!

  • Shirley Belk4 months ago

    Lovely!!! Nice brother.

  • Awww, Thomas is such a sweet little boy! Loved your story!

  • Scott Christenson4 months ago

    A perfect microfiction, I loved the ending!

  • Paul Stewart4 months ago

    Aw this is lovely. Perfect. Well done on so much loveliness. Slight edity thing - check spelling of Maisie! Sorry.

  • Dana Crandell4 months ago

    Aw, how good of Thomas! Great soty, Hannah!

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    Sibling love. How beautiful.

  • Daphsam4 months ago

    A fantastic story!

  • Alex H Mittelman 4 months ago

    Breaking and rebuilding, the way of life! For such a short story, you had a lot of details! Amazing! I always struggle with putting details in micro fiction. I either add to many and the story is to long or not enough lol. Great work!

  • Rachel Deeming4 months ago

    Ah, that's a lovely little story. If only siblings were always as generous. I might give my boys your story for homework.

  • JBaz4 months ago

    A honestly sweet endearing piece.

  • So incredibly & beautifully sweet, Hannah! Love it!

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