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"The Lock On Door"

The Whisper in the Dark'

By Isra SaleemPublished 11 days ago 3 min read
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"The Lock On Door"
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I had always been drawn to the old mansion on the hill. Rumors swirled that it was haunted, but I didn't believe them. I was a skeptic, a seeker of truth and reason. So, when I inherited the mansion from a distant relative, I saw it as an opportunity to uncover its secrets.

As I stepped inside, a chill ran down my spine. The air was thick with the scent of decay and rot. I began to explore, my footsteps echoing off the walls. Every step creaked, as if the house itself was protesting my presence.

I came across a door that caught my attention. It was old and worn, with a rusted lock that seemed to stare at me like an unblinking eye. I tried the handle, but it wouldn't budge. The lock was stuck, or perhaps it was locked from the other side.

My curiosity piqued, I searched for a key. After hours of searching, I finally found one hidden in a dusty vase. I inserted the key into the lock and turned it. The mechanism creaked, and the door groaned open.

Beyond the door lay a narrow stairway, leading down into darkness. I hesitated, my heart pounding in my chest. Something felt off, but I couldn't quite put my finger on it. I took a deep breath and began my descent.

The stairs seemed to go on forever, each step leading me deeper into the depths of the earth. I stumbled, my foot catching on a loose step. As I regained my balance, I heard a faint whisper in my ear. "You shouldn't be here."

I spun around, but there was no one in sight. The whisper seemed to come from all around me, echoing off the walls. I quickened my pace, my heart racing with fear.

At the bottom of the stairs, I found myself in a small, damp chamber. The walls were lined with ancient symbols, etched into the stone. In the center of the room, a single candle flickered, casting eerie shadows on the walls.

Suddenly, the candle went out, plunging me into darkness. I heard footsteps, heavy and deliberate, coming from the shadows. I tried to run, but my feet felt heavy, as if rooted to the spot.

A figure emerged from the darkness, its face twisted in a grotesque grimace. I tried to scream, but my voice was frozen in my throat. The figure reached out a bony hand and touched my face, and everything went black.

When I awoke, I was back in the entrance hall, the door with the rusted lock still shut before me. I stumbled backward, my mind reeling with terror. I knew then that some secrets were better left unspoken, some doors better left locked.

As I stumbled out of the mansion, I knew I would never forget the horror that lay beyond the lock on the door. I would never speak of it again, hoping that the secrets of the old house would remain forever buried. But the memory of that terrible place would haunt me, a constant reminder of the terrors that lurked in the shadows, waiting to pounce.

I tried to convince myself it was just my imagination, but I knew the truth. The lock on the door was more than just a rusted mechanism.

From that day on, I avoided the old mansion, fearful of what lay beyond the lock on the door. But sometimes, in the dead of night, I would hear the whisper in my ear, reminding me of the terror that awaited those who dared to unlock the secrets of the past.

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Isra Saleem

Versatile writer skilled in both tale & stories. Captivate readers with engaging content & immersive narratives. Passionate about informing, inspiring, & entertaining through words.

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  • Esala Gunathilake11 days ago

    Very good.

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