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a Tanka poem

By Dana StewartPublished 10 months ago Updated 10 months ago 1 min read
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You are not here to

kiss me but I feel your lips

on mine, warm and soft

live in my mind now my love

feel my soul cry in the rain

~

Author's notes: This poem is in the Japanese Tanka style. This structure follows a syllable pattern of 5-7-5-7-7. There are two parts, the initial 5-7-5 known as the kami-no-ku or upper phrase, and the second half, 7-7, known as the shimo-no-ku or the lower phrase. Together, the poem is thirty-one syllables long. Originating in the 7th century, this form of poetry was the preferred form of the Japanese Imperial Court. These poems were often written by lovers to one another.

Each word is 4 letters or less for the Short and Sweet challenge.

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Dana Stewart

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  • Grz Colm8 months ago

    I’m not sure I’ve read poems using this structure yet! Great job though. 😊

  • Kendall Defoe 9 months ago

    Very beautiful work here. I tried this form a long time ago and I should return to it.

  • Karissa E.L. Cuff9 months ago

    Awesome poem and great entry for the challenge!

  • Oh this was very good Dana. I really like the style Vocal should use it for a contest! So powerful in only 31 syllables

  • Harmony Kent9 months ago

    Oh, Dana, this is fantastic. So moving and poignant. Absolutely beautiful 💕🙂

  • Oh, this is beautiful. Thank you for sharing that style information

  • Gina C.10 months ago

    Gorgeous and heart-wrenching poem, Dana! Loved learning about the new style, too :)

  • Meagan Dion10 months ago

    Ooof! My heart! So sad, so well done!

  • This was so sad but so beautifully written! I've written a Tanka too but it's been sitting in my drafts for about a year now, lol. I loved yours!

  • Holly Pheni10 months ago

    Very nice! You added such an intriguing idea with the format!

  • Tiffany Gordon 10 months ago

    gorgeous work! Go Dana!🎉

  • Babs Iverson10 months ago

    Loving the poem's style and fabulous words!!! Love this!!!❤️❤️💕

  • Naomi Gold10 months ago

    Short and bittersweet. Very nicely done!

  • Ruth Stewart10 months ago

    This is very good. I love this Tanka style. Excellent! 👍😊💙

  • Naveedkk 10 months ago

    truly impressive. I loved it.

  • Real Poetic10 months ago

    I’ve never heard of this style. Thanks for sharing!

  • Mariann Carroll10 months ago

    Thank for introducing me to a new form of poem. Excellent work 👌🥳🥰

  • Donna Renee10 months ago

    This is so interesting and beautiful too! that last line was perfect!

  • Beautiful thoughts Dana. Excellent work as always!!!

  • Cathy holmes10 months ago

    This is fabulous, and I just learned a new form. Thank you for that and well done.

  • C. H. Richard10 months ago

    This is beautiful. That last line is so emotional. ♥️❤️

  • J. S. Wade10 months ago

    Love this 🥰 Love the form but my mind is still dwelling on the kiss. (Which is only one letter short of kids.). Hmmm.

  • D. ALEXANDRA PORTER10 months ago

    The purity of this poem and the sense of longing immediately touched me. I am curious, why did it take you two days to submit it? Your poem is beautiful.

  • Mohammed Darasi10 months ago

    I just learned of a new poetry form. Thanks Dana 😊 great poem

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