ugly thoughts
an acrostic challenge entry
disgusted and broken, she stares unseeing at the
image in the tranquil waters below. eyes glazed,
she dips a toe in to stir the ugly
that she knows is lurking there
ready to catch her eye if she lingers too long–
accusing. blaming. shaming.
could she have done better?
too late to say now.
it was always her fault his head was turned, distracted by
other women, because she was
never quite enough.
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author's note: this is not a personal narrative; however, i do feel the pain of not feeling attractive enough as i age.
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Comments (30)
Oh my, don't we, as women, know this pain all too much! Well, you are enough, as I know you know. I have felt this before, though.
This was Well written but Rough❤️📝
I could feel the hurt in this. So much truth as well. Just like her we often blame ourselves for the fault of others especially in relationships
I’m glad it’s not personal narrative but I’m amazed at how real it feels, how you make us all feel this so deeply! ❤️
Your in-depth feelings and hurt are so emotive that it brings a tear to my eye. 🥲🥰
Beautifully relatable. I've felt that way many a time in my life. Excellent job!
A poem many women can relate to. Hit me right in the soul. Great job
So natural to feel inadequate as we get older. You captured the feelings of self doubt so beautifully. Great take on the challenge!
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And believe me, that feeling isn't as gender specific as media and business wants us to think! This hits home with a wallop Heather, well done!
Winner winner… I love the way you composed this, great style with some true soul
Ugly thoughts indeed! I don’t relate to the narrator not liking their physical appearance, but I think everyone alive has wondered why they were not “enough” before—either because a person made them feel that way, or society did. Such a universal feeling you’ve conveyed here, and it hurts like hell. Reminds me of the famous Dita Von Teese quote: “You can be the ripest, juiciest peach in the world, and there's still going to be somebody who hates peaches.”
I am in total awe of your ability to poetically convey such honesty! Also, I'm so glad this is not a personal narrative, but at the same time, I want to wrap the tiny little part of you that this stemmed from in a big, warm hug. ❤️ Aging has always been one of my greatest fears, and as it becomes more and more real, I relate to this so. damn. much. Thank you for this poem because it reassures me that we are not alone in our feelings. You are a beautiful soul, my friend, inside and out!! 🥹❤️❤️
tough and too often “ugly” reality, very moving H2 😊
This is absolutely stunning in its honesty. I feel so many of us women can relate to the emotions described here, but feelings can be deceptive. We are taught that if we are nice and good to people they will generally be nice in return. Sadly, not always the case, but we aren't responsible for their poor choices. Love this, well done!
I feel this is an insecurity that the majority of us have, some more than others. I want to assure you one thing though. The ones who truly love us would still love us the same no matter how we feel we look on the outside because what they truly love is what's on the inside 🥰
I'm glad to hear you say that this is not a personal narrative for you. That having been said, no one should ever think that they were not enough or deserving of another's love. You/they are not the reason their eyes/heart wandered. I know that's true & wish every other could understand & believe it. By the same token, I empathize with the feeling. I never feel like I am worthy of another's affections.
Oh the sadness... Well written!
Deeply moving...stirring. Full of the type of content that NEEDS to be discussed.
So much...so much everything. This is incredible, truly Heather. Very nice work, pal! Just...your ability to so poetically put these raw, unrestrained emotions out there. Blood on keyboard and screen type style! Amazing!
Incredibly well written, as always. P.S. you're the most beautiful Nerd I know.
Aw Heather🥺❤️🩹. Everyone's perspective on age is different. Just know, the most priceless and desirable things in the world only grow more beautiful with age, and you're certainly a forged diamond among stones.
she dips a toe in to stir the ugly that she knows is lurking there. Really beautiful🖤
Beautifully expressed, Heather (as always)!
Sending hugs, these feelings are difficult because it is not the fault of the one affected