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The canary

by E.K. Daniels 2 months ago in surreal poetry
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within its cage

The canary
Photo by Kaikara Dharma on Unsplash

Hurried shoes on patterned linoleum,

While a woman sits listless in her seat,

sating the needs of no one.

My toes tap an impatient rhythm

in time with the tempo of scattered thoughts.

Cirrus judgements with an invisible gavel

babble calls to disorder.

Am I here?

The clocks run slower like in lucid dreams

but my hands remain the same.

Shallow air trapped beneath its cage

beside my heart, the canary in the coal mine.

Fluttered wings beat beneath the chest,

as I wrest the wishbone,

Crossing fingers for the larger half.

surreal poetry

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E.K. Daniels

Writer, watercolorist, and regular at the restaurant at the end of the universe. Twitter @inkladen

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  • VANEEZY22 days ago

    Lovely ❀

  • Just Danielabout a month ago

    Can relate a lot to the scattered thoughts, definitely feel that a lot today, wish it would go away but it's staying with me like smoke in the air for now.

  • Pavlak Montoro2 months ago

    I like your poetry

  • Sibari2 months ago

    Chills, this is lovely

  • Kendall Defoe2 months ago

    Not a bad contrast between perspectives here (are we all in cages?). Congrats on making Top Story (or is that Top Poesie?)! 🀐

  • Rachel M.J2 months ago

    Chills, this is lovely

  • Amy Hall2 months ago

    Loved and subscribed! Can't wait to read more of your work! Consider having a look at money and if you like it, please subscribe... there's a lot to come!

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Outstanding!!! Congratulations on top story!!!

  • Camille Ora-Nicole2 months ago

    Love this - "The clocks run slower like in lucid dreams but my hands remain the same." This is my favorite line, and I love how it flows into talking about the canary and shifts you from reality to dreams.

  • Matras Dohrmann2 months ago

    πŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•

  • Papo gas2 months ago

    πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‰

  • Love this poem…

  • Ba Kit2 months ago

    Very astounding piece

  • La hole2 months ago

    Very astounding piece

  • Paffin Holtz2 months ago

    We are all passengers on a journey Life is about living every day with meaning Overcoming what cannot be overcome Overcoming what we were afraid of Always be the best you can be Let's work together

  • I read it several times. It brings to mind a little girl at a family Thanksgiving gathering and she is completely absorbed with her own thoughts, as little girls are. Each line conjures up a complete picture. Very nice!

  • Nikki Say it Now2 months ago

    Love this piece ! Check out my profile! https://vocal.media/authors/nikki-say-it-now

  • Melissa Ingoldsby2 months ago

    Very astounding piece

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