Someone “superior” said…
Systems should stand strong!
Sonnets, stanzas, syllables….
Surely substantial stuff so solid, so serious, shouldn’t significantly shift?
Still sometimes seen…slowly slipping southward…
…so say something?
Surely someone shall!
Sigh…still swept some shiny success…
Seriously, say SOMEONE saw!?
Salvage some satisfaction somehow…
Sadness smothers sincere, stickler souls.
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Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
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Comments (27)
Wow, so good! My favorite line "Surely substantial stuff so solid, so serious, shouldn’t significantly shift?" To go from standing strong to significantly shifting, you traversed from one meaning to the opposite all with the same letter! This was a great one.
Seriously superb!! I love this! I admire your way with words, truly inspiring!
Incredible job, Donna! Love this one!
This is fantastic! Love it
Wow! This really is stunning! Super! )
Brilliant, Donna! 💕🙂
A thought-provoking and well-executed piece of writing.👍👍🥰
This is outstanding. Excellent work.
🤣🤣 I can hear the mic dropping! 1st of these I have read and you smashed it! Well done!
Super!
This one was a little above my knowledge skills with prose. I still liked it but probably for a whole different reason.
Lol, loveeeed the sass here!
sooooooooo judging by the comments there's a new challenge! this was great without context cos you know me and my love of wordplay!
Excellent expose ere everyones exciting expectations! 🥰
Sensational! Seriously! 💖
Thank god I don't have a lisp, there would be saliva spray everywhere! 😅 Well done, Donna! I like this one a lot.
This is why I stick to prose. I get the alliteration, but what are you saying? Okay, I'm a neanderthal but you lost me on this one Donna. Judging from the other comments it's great, so I'll go along with them.
"Suffering succotash'', says Sylvester, that's good alliteration right there! And yes, I had to use the spellchecker for 'succotash'. 😁
So significantly stated ♥️
You came out swinging with this one! Great entry!
Great Job you made it look so easy! I’m still like what letter should I use😂 not only did you already come up with an entry but you also wrote a really good poem outstanding
Simply super!
Simply superb! Skillfully scrawled! Spectacular statement!
Oh I love some alliteration this was excellent!! Was this a writing challenge you gave to yourself or did the "s" theme come instinctually? I'm always so interested in process for something unique like this!
Some stigmatized systems should stop spilling syllables seductively... So... Share sedulously! ;)