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Syllabic Shift


By Donna ReneePublished 2 months ago 1 min read
Syllabic Shift
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Someone “superior” said…

Systems should stand strong!

Sonnets, stanzas, syllables….

Surely substantial stuff so solid, so serious, shouldn’t significantly shift?

Still sometimes seen…slowly slipping southward…

…so say something?

Surely someone shall!

Sigh…still swept some shiny success…

Seriously, say SOMEONE saw!?

Salvage some satisfaction somehow…

Sadness smothers sincere, stickler souls.

sad poetryheartbreak

About the Creator

Donna Renee

Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.


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  • Stephen Kramer Avitabile2 months ago

    Wow, so good! My favorite line "Surely substantial stuff so solid, so serious, shouldn’t significantly shift?" To go from standing strong to significantly shifting, you traversed from one meaning to the opposite all with the same letter! This was a great one.

  • Donna Fox2 months ago

    Seriously superb!! I love this! I admire your way with words, truly inspiring!

  • Dana Crandell2 months ago

    Incredible job, Donna! Love this one!

  • Morgana Miller2 months ago

    This is fantastic! Love it

  • KJ Aartila2 months ago

    Wow! This really is stunning! Super! )

  • Harmony Kent2 months ago

    Brilliant, Donna! 💕🙂

  • Quincy.V2 months ago

    A thought-provoking and well-executed piece of writing.👍👍🥰

  • This is outstanding. Excellent work.

  • Caroline Jane2 months ago

    🤣🤣 I can hear the mic dropping! 1st of these I have read and you smashed it! Well done!

  • Dana Stewart2 months ago


  • JBaz2 months ago

    This one was a little above my knowledge skills with prose. I still liked it but probably for a whole different reason.

  • Lol, loveeeed the sass here!

  • Paul Stewart2 months ago

    sooooooooo judging by the comments there's a new challenge! this was great without context cos you know me and my love of wordplay!

  • J. S. Wade2 months ago

    Excellent expose ere everyones exciting expectations! 🥰

  • Leslie Writes2 months ago

    Sensational! Seriously! 💖

  • Lamar Wiggins2 months ago

    Thank god I don't have a lisp, there would be saliva spray everywhere! 😅 Well done, Donna! I like this one a lot.

  • Mark Gagnon2 months ago

    This is why I stick to prose. I get the alliteration, but what are you saying? Okay, I'm a neanderthal but you lost me on this one Donna. Judging from the other comments it's great, so I'll go along with them.

  • Roy Stevens2 months ago

    "Suffering succotash'', says Sylvester, that's good alliteration right there! And yes, I had to use the spellchecker for 'succotash'. 😁

  • C. H. Richard2 months ago

    So significantly stated ♥️

  • Loryne Andawey2 months ago

    You came out swinging with this one! Great entry!

  • Great Job you made it look so easy! I’m still like what letter should I use😂 not only did you already come up with an entry but you also wrote a really good poem outstanding

  • Caroline Craven2 months ago

    Simply super!

  • Ahna Lewis2 months ago

    Simply superb! Skillfully scrawled! Spectacular statement!

  • River Joy2 months ago

    Oh I love some alliteration this was excellent!! Was this a writing challenge you gave to yourself or did the "s" theme come instinctually? I'm always so interested in process for something unique like this!

  • Kendall Defoe2 months ago

    Some stigmatized systems should stop spilling syllables seductively... So... Share sedulously! ;)

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