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Slowly sinking

a silent descent

By Heather HublerPublished about a year ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2023
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sixty seconds, head

underwater, lungs screaming,

'breaking point' reached-breathe.

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Written for the Time Capsule haiku challenge.

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Comments (36)

  • Misha Kellyabout a year ago

    Beautifully done. This flows with ease much like that of our breath. Congrats!

  • The Invisible Writerabout a year ago

    Great work

  • Dana Stewartabout a year ago

    Oh, this one stuck a chord. Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Holly Pheniabout a year ago

    Lady, I feel this one! Thanks for sharing and congrats on the top story!

  • Maja Kamionekabout a year ago

    A beautiful capture of time. I resonate to the tearing apart feeling, then a breath to find ourselves back in the present.

  • PK Colleran about a year ago

    Excellent description of what all swimmers have felt at some moment or another.

  • Samara Simsonabout a year ago

    Always love to read your work. Very well written.

  • Joe Pattersonabout a year ago

    Good job and congratulations on your top story friend.

  • Sonia Heidi Unruhabout a year ago

    I can FEEL this! We all need to be reminded to breathe....

  • Veronica Coldironabout a year ago

    Congratulations on a top story!! I said it before, you have mastered the art of the haiku!

  • Emily Marie Concannonabout a year ago

    YAY 🙌😁❤️❤️❤️

  • Testabout a year ago

    Oh, I love this! ❤️ Congrats on your Top Story, Heather.

  • Aphoticabout a year ago

    So deep. Felt. Another great one as usual!

  • C. H. Richardabout a year ago

    Congratulations on Top story! Well done ♥️ I love the intense visual you created with three lines.

  • Congratulations on your Awesome TopStory Poetry 🎉😉💯❗❗

  • JBazabout a year ago

    Once again you nailed it. beautiful flowing words that strike a chord.

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    whoop, there it is! Congrats, you nerdy rock star!

  • Mariann Carrollabout a year ago

    Excellent

  • suman mohanabout a year ago

    Just Superb!

  • Rick Henry Christopher about a year ago

    Wonderful writing! Excellent imagery.

  • Lamar Wigginsabout a year ago

    First off, Loved the pic. Second, very dramatic and final. Hearted for sure!

  • Ooooo, this is a very unique take on the challenge! You're so brilliant! Loved this so much!

  • Paul Stewartabout a year ago

    Are you feeling alright? Seriously though, loved this...the subtitle and the lungs screaming part, especially!

  • Lea Waske about a year ago

    I was holding my breath reading this! What a sensation!

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