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slowly succeeding

By Donna ReneePublished 3 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
Photo by Chermiti Mohamed on Unsplash

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~~~soft, supple, smooth skin~~~

s.t.r.e.t.c.h.e.s, SCARS, starts sinking some...

sunshine sprinkles stay.

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*This time capsule haiku Vocal challenge happens to be occurring over my birthday and, well, nothing makes me think about the feeling and passage of time quite like looking in the mirror and noticing the slow progression of years marching across my face!*

**I didn't start out writing this as a Tautogram/Haiku (I didn't even know what a tautogram was until I googled "what are poems called where the words all start with the same letter" and then ended up in a deep dive on that subject! Turns out there are lots of tautogram haiku combos out there to be found but I didn't see too many here!**

***Maybe Tautograms can be Vocal's next challenge???***


About the Creator

Donna Renee

Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.


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  • Roy Stevens2 months ago

    Hey, thanks for showing me a new poetic form, that's very cool!

  • Clever in its S's, and I loved the formatting and word choices. Gotta love those sunshine sprinkles - Anneliese

  • Tiffany Gordon 3 months ago

    Beautiful work!

  • suman mohan3 months ago

    Really very very nice.

  • Nichelle Calhoun3 months ago

    Love your tautogram. Did not know about this subgenre until reading yours. Beautiful.

  • Lord Farquaad 3 months ago

    Very well done

  • JBaz3 months ago

    Loved this the first time. Congratulation well deserved

  • Nicole Johnson3 months ago

    Can we please all agree to call freckles “sunshine sprinkles” from now on? 🥰 Love this, fantastic work!

  • Sonia Heidi Unruh3 months ago

    I LOVE this! The words flow so naturally I didn't even realize it was a tautogram. Bravo!

  • Misha Kelly3 months ago

    Beautifully done. Outstanding and unique all in one. Congrats on top story!

  • Congratulations on this excellent Top Story

  • Melissa Ingoldsby3 months ago

    Well done!! Congratulations 🎉 on top story!

  • Loryne Andawey3 months ago

    Congratulations on your Top Story! 😄🤗

  • Brenton F3 months ago

    Many happy returns! - thank you for your words, enjoy your skin!

  • Heather Hubler3 months ago

    Congratulations on a well deserved Top Story!! This was fantastic! I loved the idea of it and your ability to convey it so artfully. Well done :)

  • Cathy holmes3 months ago

    Yay. Congrats on the top story.

  • I love this!!! Outstanding!

  • Veronica Coldiron3 months ago

    Super glad I got to read this! I not only learned something new, I Looooved your haiku and I think a Tautogram/Haiku would be an excellent challenge!

  • Wow wow this was very good! First love this *new* (new for me) form of poetry! I have never heard of it and am only vaguely aware of what a haiku is! But I loved the words they held a lot of.powrr! And your story at the end really gave more depth!! Best of luck ☺️☺️

  • Loryne Andawey3 months ago

    Ooohhg! A tautogram is a style I read about but did not really see in practice. Kinda makes me want to give it a try. Beautifully done 😄

  • Holly Pheni3 months ago

    Wow! I've never thought of a tautogram. I bet more will pop up inspired by your wonderful piece! This is very beautiful; striking imagery.

  • Lamar Wiggins3 months ago

    That was so cool to read. I read it a few times in a row and the flow kept getting better. Definitely worthy of Top Story! Thanks for sharing and educating.

  • C. H. Richard3 months ago

    This is so cool. I love it! ❤️ Tautogram is new to me too. Yours brought me right into the middle of summer feeling 🌼

  • Whoaaa, I didn't know poems where all the words start with the same letter are called Tautograms. I knew that format but not the term. I learned something new today! And you executed your Tautogram/Haiku very well! Loved it so much!

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