Please Watch my Watering, My Love
A Fretful Crown Cinquain
My love
I’m terrified
For the children we’ll have
Because I just killed a fucking
Cactus
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Cactus
You heard that right
I thought it was thirsty
So I went ahead and gave it
Water
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Water
In which it drowned
But that’s not all, oh no!
You should see what I did to the
Lilies
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Lilies
That have withered
Because I thought they too
Would suffer from the surfeit and
Perish
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Perish
Like these chicken
Thoughts. Please help me, my love.
Watch my watering so they can
Flower
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My first encounter with crown cinquains was through the work of the wonderful Dharrsheena Raja Segarran who wrote Call of the Ocean, which you can read below.
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Comments (9)
Aww. The poor cactus. Love it!
So relatable, I had a cactus and it did not live long ,lol
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Excellent, and great to see you branching out into other poetic forms, though I get lost with them, though I fined defined forms can often help you in your creation
I loved that you tried something new and it worked so well! I was laughing a little as I can pretty much kill any plant without trying...hahaha. But really, this was thoughtful, clever and a joy to read. Great work :) And thank you for adding me to your profile. I appreciate it!!
Lol, your Crown Cinquain made me laugh because I'm the sameeeeee! I cannot keep a plant alive even if my life depended on it. I can never be trusted with a kid. Loved your humorous take on the Crown Cinquain and thank you for the shoutout!
I love this so much, Loryne! I really adored the stanza about your future kids 😅 I've definitely had that thought too! And I loved all the flower elements in here. This is such a wonderful style. Amazing!
Magnificent!!! Loving it!!!💕💖
This is fantastic! It’s hard watering cactus, I’ve done that too! 😀