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My last fight, this moon
of your beginning. Show me
sparks against the stars.
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Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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Comments (15)
This is fantastic I always enjoy a piece I can interpret myself. "My last flight," but the sparks can ignite you once again. I may be way off on this, but that's what I see.
Full moon here tonight. Watched it rise over the goal posts at our high school homecoming football game. We lost 34-36 on a last minute touchdown. But it was a fun game & there were a lot of sparks we witnessed tonight (along with some great sportsmanship).
Just like Poppy, I had to read this a few times! It was so deep! I loved it!
Ooh, nice haiku Mackenzie. Surprising in the way it's cut, and the words delivered.
Agree with others, that "show me sparks gainst the stars" line is great.
Very nice, indeed! Thanks for this.
I love it!! I had to read it multiple times to let it sink in. ‘Show me sparks against the stars’ is an absolutely gorgeous line.
Nice work great stuff ❤️
Pal! You've done it again - you never cease to amaze me with your skills and handle on the written word!
lovin your style my friend, nice ❤️
Love the imagery of that!
Love your Haiku!
Very nicely done
Oh my God, this is incredible, Mackenzie! Drawing so much meaning from this stunning piece✨So much said in so few lines. 👏🏽👏🏽👏🏽💫💞
Beautiful :)