A slip of the tongue like agnathan
From the temperate region comes,
The gloriously handsome, Rasmussen.
Totally besot was our little Katheryn
With minimal effort her heartstring strums,
A slip of the tongue like agnathan.
The sweetness of saccharin
All her defenses he overcomes,
The gloriously handsome, Rasmussen.
She should listen to her gut, hear her abdomen.
Rose colored glass blinds and numbs,
A slip of the tongue like agnathan.
The air -like intake of cyanogen
Totally absorbed she succumbs.
The gloriously handsome, Rasmussen.
Oh, why oh why couldn’t it have been Magnuson
Her endomorphic brain plumbs
A slip of the tongue like agnathan
The gloriously handsome, Rasmussen.
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Saroyan Coles
I want to empower others with my writing. I have always dreamed of seeing my name, on something.
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Whispering Woods Challenge Winners
Congratulations to Morgan Christy Rickards for their winning Whispering Woods story, Guardian at the Gate. Morgan has been a Vocal creator since February 2021, and this is their first time placing in Challenge — well done, starting with a win! Guardian at the Gate draws evocatively from Welsh tales of the Cantre'r Gwaelod, a lost sunken kingdom between the forest and the sea. Heledd’s dangerous adventure pulls her towards the water but her spirit is anchored in the woods: Morgan’s writing is atmospheric and exciting.
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Comments (1)
Interesting. I couldn't work out what Agnathan was. Agnatha is a jawless fish. Cyanogen is a gas that interferes with breathing. And endomorphic means rounded, with a tendency to fat. Now, before you get upset, it's actually quite a lovely poem. It has a nice rhythm. I suggest you treat it as a first draft and have an edit. And pay attention to your commas - they are all over the place and you are one full stop missing. This all comes with practice so keep practising and I look forward to reading your next one.