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In a Car Park

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By Harmony KentPublished 7 months ago โ€ข 1 min read
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In a Car Park
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In a car, in a busy car park

Many folks pass by

Caring must be a declining art

Wherein most paint as well as they fly

Not a one stops to see

Why tears stream down my face

Nobody thinks to help me

Like Iโ€™m not part of the human race

I guess public pain is embarrassing

Both for me and for you

Seems thereโ€™s something fundamental missing

When people decide thereโ€™s nothing to do

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[Author's note: this poem will become part of my poetry book in progress, Suffering Soul (changed from the working title of Fibro Soul, as I wanted the book to be more inclusive). I'd love to know what you think, and if you could leave a heart, I'd be even more delighted. Thank you ๐Ÿ’•๐Ÿ˜Š]

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Harmony Kent

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I began writing at 40 after a life-changing injury. An avid reader & writer, I love to review & support my fellow authors.

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  • Mariann Carroll6 months ago

    This is very sad. You have not written a story in a while, I hope you are ok? โค๏ธ

  • Donna Fox (HKB)6 months ago

    This is so heartbreaking and relatable!! Masterfully written with a great rhyme scheme and message behind it!! Great work Harmony!!

  • Lena Folkert7 months ago

    Oh geez. Iโ€™m crying. Every word resonates. Those who donโ€™t have chronic pain just donโ€™t get it. Itโ€™s like they think they do cuz they know pain. But to live every day. Every hour. Every single minute in pain. To bear it usually in silence because your pain tolerance is so high. Out of necessity. Most peopleโ€™s ten is your five and when most people would go to the emergency room you go to work and suck it up only to go home and wallow in the sleeplessness of pain until you do it again. Whoa. Iโ€™m sorry. Trigggered. But beautiful work dear. Some see. Some know. Some feel. โค๏ธโค๏ธ

  • Robbie Cheadle7 months ago

    A very poignant poem ๐Ÿฆ‹๐Ÿฉต

  • Gwen Plano7 months ago

    I'm daily brought to tears by the insensitivity of folks. Powerful poem, Harmony. โค๏ธ

  • Public pain is embarrassing. That line hit me so hard! I guess many people hesitate from helping is because it makes them uncomfortable. Or maybe because it's all an elaborate prank or a social experiment. The worst case scenario is it being a scam. We just don't know who to trust ๐Ÿฅบ

  • Beem Weeks7 months ago

    So many are afraid to get involved, Harmony. That whole comfort zone thing. But if we're human, we'll reach out.

  • Kymber Hawke7 months ago

    This is so sad. It makes me wonder why we aren't kinder to one another?

  • L.C. Schรคfer7 months ago

    You're right. Pain makes people uncomfortable ๐Ÿ˜• Even as I write that I realise what a strange sentence it is.

  • David Prosser7 months ago

    I think people care Harmony but are afraid to get involved. A sad reflection on the MYOB brigade.We need to become more involved with others in order to better their lives and our own. Huge Hugs

  • John W. Howell7 months ago

    A sad commentary, Harmony. Would it hurt to say, "Can I help you?"

  • Mae Clair7 months ago

    That's so heartbreaking, Harmony. Even more so because it conveys sad truth about living in an uncaring world. Here's hoping many of us learn NOT to pass by. ๐Ÿ’•

  • D.L. Finn7 months ago

    You captured that uncomfortable moment in life when people don't know how to respond, so they do or say nothing at all. Beautifully said, Harmony. Xo

  • Test7 months ago

    Beautiful, ๐Ÿ’“โค๐Ÿ˜˜

  • Sarah Stuart7 months ago

    I wonder if people ever look inside parked cars? Sit on the bonnet or the roof, and maybe,,, I like your new poetry book title too.

  • Paul Stewart7 months ago

    This is stunningly sad, Harmony and have no doubt it's an experience many people have had! Beautifully poetic, but hard and sad!

  • Donna Renee7 months ago

    ๐Ÿ˜ข๐Ÿ˜ขโค๏ธ. Beautiful, Harmony! I like the new book title!

  • Grz Colm7 months ago

    I love this little snapshot of life poem! That is exciting you are compiling a book of poetry. Well done! ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ‘

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