Elegy of the Airplane
A call to a passenger inside
Here I am and there you are.
You can’t see me and neither can that guy,
that stranger sat near to you, pressed
to your shoulder, torturously
beside [read: robber of my intimacy].
The eight year old behind you, striving
against cabin pressure, tossing
herself to regain a blip of comfort
[read: me] she can't see a flicker
of my existence.
Here I am watching you,
you, [feel: without me]
as you plummet through a glowing mountain.
-
Here I am and there you are.
While you can see more
[read: more],
you can’t see me.
Your gaze falls farther
than my heart has stretched before
Wider than my spirit
can hug your smile
Higher even than my tears,
oh, my tears,
can clear that figure of you in the sky [read: beyond].
Your eyes don’t fall on me,
and the misted sky is solid to you
and to me, you’re fading away
past, above, and through a jagged, stoic cliff.
-
I am here, and over there you are.
You’re zooming past me
at unfathomable speed and I,
I am at the mercy of planetary spin
[read: unfathomable speed] [feel:
nothing].
Singularly together—
in frame, a moment, till life presses play
and you’re gone, jetting into,
rocketing through, falling past
a blue iced summit in the penumbra of my eye.
About the Creator
Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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Comments (4)
Blue eyes summit in the penumbra of my eye! I loved that line so much! This was a very beautifully written poem!
Stunning. This poem extends beyond a sorrowful airport departure for me. It gathers loss eloquently, a slow rip.
Wow! This is beautiful. I love the way you formatted it. Great work.
Heart stopping!I will remember this poem the next time I face a tearful airport goodbye.