Carnival
Wild ride
They dance in the air
The sweet potato fries
Floating and bobbing
Just like fireflies
The moon is below us
My stomach feels weak
We are on the Ferris wheel
It’s adventure we seek
You smile
And give me a token
I can’t look in your eyes
We haven’t spoken
I blink twice
And my bare feet feel sand
I’m in the ocean
Where is land?
Where’d you go?
I can hear the music playing
The carnival is in full swing
What was I saying?
A bell chimes
Now I’m in a big tent
Watching you in the ring
bending a serpent
I scream and shout
You smile and dance
I can’t take it anymore
I wake up without any pants
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Comments (12)
She feels really swept away.
hahaha you got me with the last line! I need to read this a few more times, I think 🤣
Greate Blog , and good job
Oh my goodness, 'Enuff'' said. Very interesting and steamy.
This is how most of my dreams feel 💚
Oh I LOVE this one!!
This made me feel like I was actually on a Ferris wheel! Amazing poem!
This poem is a treasure.
hahaha that last line. This is very good, love it.
Such a cute story. Great job building such a creative illusion
Fun :)
That last line...hahahaha! This was great! Loved the dreamy, carnival feel, and the way you worded it made it feel like pressure was rising and I was spinning, until POP the dream was over. Great work!