Blood Feud
A Narrative Poem
Darkness.
Ravens cry, wolves howl,
Thunder erupts from deep within the clouds.
***
Lightning cracks,
Illuminating the sky,
And with it,
The intent to kill glistens along the edge of my blade.
***
Sulphur,
I smell sulphur.
Deep and rich,
Conjuring memories of her in the springs.
Or are they visions?
Visions of hope for what comes after?
***
Crack!
Thor beats his hammer once more,
And in the brief light I see the figure rush toward me.
His strike comes from the shadows,
Axeblade shrouded in smoke.
***
Instinct,
Deflect,
The clash of steel on steel roars louder than the world-serpent in my ears,
Like a thousand times before.
***
I want to live.
I need to live.
Love begs that I not fail,
Not so soon after opening to it.
***
I see her in my minds eye.
Hair flowing,
Golden as the treasure I’ve courted,
Flickering in the embers.
***
Another strike.
This one finds flesh.
His, not mine,
My blade thirsty for blood.
***
A taste for it,
A hunger for more.
Hatred.
***
Anger swells,
The world grows red,
Before me he stands, dripping in scarlet sweat.
***
Rage bubbles from deep within, summoning growls from my chest,
Erupting in a roar of my own,
Louder,
Angrier,
More furious than Fenrir himself.
***
Boom!
From the mountain spews sparks and flame,
Molten rock pouring out from its gaping mouth against the blackness of the sky.
***
Along it’s eruption I too explode,
Slicing out with the sword my father left me.
It tears muscle,
Severs ligament.
Blood spews from the jugular.
***
Calm,
Peaceful.
He drops to his knees.
A life of anguish extinguished in a moment.
***
A flame grown cold against the heat of battle.
***
Blood,
Everywhere.
It swells beneath my feet,
Drips from our blades,
Forms pools in the warming rock beneath his lifeless body.
***
I breathe.
It’s done.
The feud is settled.
***
In my mind I see her eyes,
Her perfect nose,
Her smile.
That golden hair flows in the breeze,
Her hands brush wildflowers as she glides toward me in the morning sun.
***
I fall to my knees.
Her weight between my arms fades to emptiness,
Her aroma replaced with the metallic scent of war.
***
From my heart rests the blade of his axe,
From the wound pours all my love along a stream of blood.
Heat burns my lungs as I breathe my last breath.
The world fades to black behind my tiring eyes.
***
Now it’s done.
Now the feud is settled.
Now my family are safe.
***
Their futures unfold before me as the Valkyries summon me home.
Carrying me to the gates of Valhalla atop winged horses,
Where Odin awaits watchfully in his grand hall.
About the Creator
Gary Ragnarsson
Deep thinker, stoic, and writer from the UK, sharing everything from philosophical insights to my most intimate, personal stories.
In a world consumed by chasing more, I’m over here embracing less on purpose.
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Comments (8)
This is Great❤️😉❗
Wow! Enough said... No seriously, this was quite a tale that had me going all the way till the end. Great job!
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I am absolutely smitten by this poem! Not only does it resonate with legends, it reminds me in some small way, (mostly the vivid imagery) of Beowulf, only somehow... better. ;)
This is a great read - the imagery is striking. :)
Fantastic and the imagery was perfect!!! Loved it!!!
This was epic!! The descriptions really pulled me in. Great work :)
Excellent words, good chance or winning or placing in the challenge Gary, something I could never do 🙂
Whoaaa, this was awesomeeee!