Black Sun
covered in beauty
A murmuration
of a thousand heart beats,
a thousand swoops and dives.
Tens of thousands of feathers
folding, racing, spreading, chasing,
natural as air
yet rare to behold.
A thousand bodies, swift and strong,
bold and sure,
taking to the skies, hoping to mesmerize,
protect; be as one.
The beauty in unity,
awesome in its simplicity
to come together,
to share life.
A pulsing, twisting, wild dance
emblazoned in the sky.
A rare vision to feast upon,
blotting out the sun
in a roiling cloud of black.
A pinnacle reached,
a joy transcended
as the will of few becomes
the burden of all
in a timeless rhythm of
following, then leading,
spreading apart
only to come together
again and again
in aerial feats of wonder and awe.
Painting ribbons and funnels,
swells and rounded edge
as though formed by the
skilled hands of a master.
Tens of thousands of lungs
burn and hearts race to catch
the waning light of day,
escape the bitter sting of loss.
Desperately seeking safety
in numbers
as the push and pull of predator and prey
never ceases, the cycle of life–
unbroken.
Only to disperse like a funnel of wind,
broken apart bit by bit
until the last has settled
to roost for the night,
leaving their imprint behind
on those lucky enough to witness
the majesty of black sun.
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This one went deeper than I could fathom. Really well done Heather. I agree with Veronica about your painting of words.
Wow, this is outstanding Heather!!! I saw it in the comments for nomination of Real Poetic’s latest challenge… poems that will inspire her the most ❤️🙏✨
I'm totally blown away. You create images with words that invoke such emotion and thought! GREAT poem! I LOVE this one! VERY deep!
The flow and your expressions are astonishing! Really enjoyable to read!
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Such a wonderful flow and beautifully written. Loved it!
It's so rare to see the word "murmuration" used. Such a delight to see and such a wonderful piece!
appreciate that Dean chose to share this one again!
Oh so beautifully written! And most definitely an amazing sight to behold in person. Great choice for the challenge!
Now that's a majestic poem about flocks of birds. Still, I feel like this could also be applied to certain swarms of bugs like butterflies or dragonflies. Heck, on certain lakes there are known what's to be called tornados, that are just large mating clouds of flying insects in the air. Another thing that this makes me think of is, what would it be like if it were a school of fish and a predator from bellow is watching a giant safety ball of fish swim about, blocking the light of the sun from penetrating further, deeper, into the waters.
The movement and the imagery are spectacular. Awesome poem Heather. 🥰
Beautiful imagery, Heather! ❤️ You’re going to win this one!
Lovely exploration of the natural world.
Excellent job Heather. A lot of wonderful symbolism and depth.
" The beauty in unity, awesome in its simplicity" wonderful!!!!! I might use it as a quote and refer to you dear Heather!!!. really enjoy it!!!! great piece!
You have an amazing way with words!
Awesome! It felt like I just ran a mile after reading that. The words all fell into place and tumbled down the page as my eyes tried to keep up. Great effect. You get two hearts for this, no, three...💖💖💖 Plus the one I left up top.
Le Sigh! Only joking! I've not been able to comment on Vocal in a while so had to fit that in there! Wowser...another Classic Hubler piece. just so much to love. Well done!
Fantastic, Heather! 💕🙂
Beautiful!!
Good lord, Heather. That is absolutely beautiful. So, so original and executed with amazing precision. Choice of words and pacing was seriously next to nothing. God damn.
Very engrossing. Such wonderful images come to mind.
Wow! Absolutely captivating start to finish
Your poem reminded me of this short film which I have always loved. https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=iRNqhi2ka9k
Love "the beauty in unity" because it's so true. Beautifully lyrical!