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Please Let Me In.

Don’t Open the Door.

By Jake NappiPublished 2 years ago Updated 2 years ago 5 min read
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The cabin in the woods had been abandoned for years, but one night, a candle burned in the window. They say a deformed hermit named Annie Sage used to live there alone, sick of being ridiculed by society because of her appearance. She would live off the land by purifying water and hunting anything or anyone that dared tread in her territory.

Ever since she mysteriously vanished one night without a trace, some say they can still hear her weeps and wails from the woods, ashamed of her horrific face.

Of course, being the skeptic that you are, you decided to go check the area out one late autumn night.

After parking your car at a rundown playground that probably hasn’t been used in over a decade, you pull out your flashlight, and venture into the dark, foggy forest.

Several ways in, all that’s heard is the ambient sound of crickets chirping. Your feet crunch through the dry the leaves. Soon, you begin to hear a second pair of footsteps shadowing your own!

You stop -- The footsteps stop.

You shine your light around — Nothing.

You continue on, no more second pairs of footsteps heard. Just your imagination?

Soon enough… there it is! The legendary cabin, with the candle burning in the window! Not enough to convince you though. Anybody can break into an abandoned cabin and put a candle in the window.

You approach.

You grab the rusted door handle. You push -

CREAK.

It slowly opens.

You take a step inside. The first thing you notice is the scent of old rotting wood. Not surprising from the condition this place is in. Sure enough, there’s the candle. Still sitting right beside the door in the window.

You shut the door and take a look around. An old broken cot lies in the corner, a shattered mirror sits across from it.

You aim your light on the wall… “Beauty is Skin Deep” written across it. You continue to slowly shine your light along the wall… “Beauty is Skin Deep” “Beauty is Skin Deep” written over and over again… your light reaches the window with the burning candle - A FACE OUTSIDE!

You shriek and drop the flashlight!

You quickly pick it up!

You aim it back at the window - not a soul in sight. They say the mind plays tricks on you. You walk over to the window and look out - nothing there.

You pauses for a breath.

Your heart continues to race.

You aim the light on the wall… “Aren’t I beautiful?” written on the wall. WTF? That wasn’t there before! You beam your light along the wall… “Aren’t I beautiful?” “Aren’t I Beautiful?” written everywhere, replacing the previous sentence. Your hands begin to sweat -

WHOOSH.

The candle blows out!

That’s weird, there’s no draft in here. You get a sick feeling in your stomach. It’s your gut telling you it’s time to dip! But then -

BANG BANG BANG!

Intense knocking at the cabin door! You jolt in surprise! You take several steps back, unsure of what to say or do!

A familiar voice behind the door… “Help! Please let me in!” It sounds just like YOU. A doppelgänger? Is it just a trick? You contemplate opening the door. The door aggressively rattles back and forth! “Please hurry! She’s coming! Open the door!”

Something in your head is telling you that someone needs help, but that gut feeling is telling you DO NOT open the door!

BANG BANG!

“PLEASE HURRY!”

The door shakes! You shriek!

Silence.

You tilt your head in confusion. You cautiously approach the door and press your ear up against it. You don’t hear anything. You look over at the window. The candle is still blown out. You contemplate taking a peak outside.

You slowly move your head into view of the window. You aim your flashlight outside - nobody. You breathe a sigh of relief. You wanna get the hell out of there but that gut feeling telling you not to open the door remains. What should you do?

You grab the handle and prepare to make a break for it - when suddenly a creak in the floorboard behind you breaks the silence!

“I envy your beauty” is heard behind you!

Without hesitation, you whip that door open and bolt into the foggy forest! Adrenaline pumping in your veins, your feet crunch through the leaves at super sonic speeds! You glance behind you - a darkened silhouette stands motionless in the fog at a distance! However the further you run, it doesn’t seem to get any smaller!

You aim your light in front of you, hoping to eventually see the abandoned playground, followed by your parked car waiting for you.

Weeping and wailing are heard behind you, closing in fast! You continue running! Suddenly, you see something in the distance… the cabin! Candle burning in the window like before! Did you run in a cirlce? Couldn’t be, you ran in a straight line!

You glance behind you - the silhouette skips towards you with its arms above its head! You scream and run up to the cabin door! It’s locked, but you hear somebody inside. You franctically pound on the door!

You scream “HELP! Please let me in!”

You glance behind you - the silhouette gains on you! You now make it out to be the silhouette of a woman! Her body is bone thin. Her fingernails are long and unkempt. Her long, wirey hair covers her face! She takes large exaggerated footsteps towards you while flailing her arms!

You turn to the door!

BANG BANG!

You scream “PLEASE HURRY! She’s coming!”

You look behind you!

She’s 10 feet away! Crawling backwards towards you with her back arched! Her hair hangs below her head, revealing… her face!

Her widen open, blood shot eyes stare you down! Her crooked, jagged teeth grin at you! Half her face bulges out with marks and scars all over it!

She’s several feet away!

She sticks out her hand towards you…

You turn around and grab the door hand! You aggressively rattle the door!

You scream “PLEASE HURRY!”

Too late!

A hand grabs your arm and drags you off into the forest!

Your screams fade out…!

The last thing locals reported hearing of you… was the sound of your weeps and wails coming from the woods at night.

Horror
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About the Creator

Jake Nappi

A Screenwriter, Filmmaker, and huge fan of Horror films (especially slashers!)

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  • Eta George2 years ago

    This is a fantastic!

  • Jyme Pride2 years ago

    Wow, I can see your filmmaking skills shining through with this story. You paint a truly griping sight. At first, I didn't know whether to feel sorry for the crippled woman or afraid for the narrator. Your first-person voice here works well. I would have liked to know a little more history about both characters, like, maybe their names or even a hint about some of their life experiences that brought them both to this moment. Other than that, great story, full of goosebumps.

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