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An excerpt from my novel Atonement, the sequel to my novel The Half Paper Moon(heavily modifed for the challenge)

By Melissa IngoldsbyPublished 4 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
Photo by Tim Foster on Unsplash

They were in a beat up Chevy pick up truck and on the run.

It was a silent ride early in the morning when he first escaped with his love, and Edward had his hands on the driver’s wheel with a death grip. Fresh out of the prison setting, John seemed in a catatonic state as soon as they hit the road. Moving out of Irvine, California and heading toward the San Diego–Tijuana trans border, things were feeling safer, but Edward was getting more worried about his boyfriend.

The guard, Felix, had turned the favor into a brand new set of lives; forging new IDs and identities for them(for a price), and Edward had bought the old Chevy from Felix’s sister at a discounted rate.

In a series of seemingly endless blunders and mixups, Felix made it seem like the scheduling for three different prisoners were switched, and there was an oversight from his department head, which created the ‘error’.

Felix had mixed up the schedules so terribly, it took several days to figure out the issue. John H. Becker, who was on his way to a pre-scheduled psychiatrist meeting at court never made it.

Love was their escape.


About the Creator

Melissa Ingoldsby

I write short stories and poetry. I hope you find yourself in between the spaces of my words.

My Patheos column profile on art history.

My debut novel I am Bexley has been published by Resurgence Novels and you can read it on their app here.

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Comments (19)

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  • L.C. Schäfer4 months ago

    Wait! I need to read it again...

  • Caroline Jane4 months ago

    Great distillation. I have had to read 5 times to get all the elements.... well plotted! ❤️

  • Gal Mux4 months ago

    How can so few words tell such a complex twist. A true editor you are! Congrats on TS

  • Awww, I always love reading about Edward and John! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Nobody4 months ago

    Great read

  • Christina M S4 months ago

    I liked john

  • marie ehlenbach4 months ago

    Congratulation! I liked John & Edward!

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    John and Edward take their love on the road! Great micro, Melissa and Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Real Poetic4 months ago


  • Holly Pheni4 months ago

    John and Edward never disappoint! Suspense, adventure, and romance follow them everywhere. I suspect it's because Melissa is a very talented story crafter. :)

  • Babs Iverson4 months ago

    Sweet!!! Inside job, loved it!!! Congratulation on Top Story!!!💖💖💕

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    Great story. Congrats on the TS

  • Gerald Holmes4 months ago

    So much said in so few words. Well done and congrats on the Top Story.

  • Dana Crandell4 months ago

    Congratulations, Melissa!

  • Congratulations on your Top Story Sis, great work

  • Yes, I Really Enjoyed Reading This and now you have me thinking about the story😉❗

  • MARIE ODEMS 4 months ago


  • Mariann Carroll4 months ago

    So many events going on in such a micro story, this is going to make a great sequel 🥳🥰🎊

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