A Man's World
a microfiction story
A warm breeze ushered them forward as they moved to the starting stalls.
"We can do this," she breathed.
Muffled snickers from behind made her cheeks burn.
"Don't listen to them. This is our day."
Time ground to a halt as they waited for the bell to sound.
Ring!
Muscles bunched and jumped propelling them out the gate and down the frontstretch. Her silks rippled as Colors of Silence flew around the track.
Only a hundred yards left.
The filly's pace began to falter...but this was their day...the Run for the Roses finally captured by two females.
Victory.
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Author's notes: Only 6 female jockeys have ridden in the Kentucky Derby to date, and none of them have managed to grasp the elusive win.
Find out more about them here:
https://youtu.be/TuKuFlqrvPc - Look at that girl go!!
And only three fillies have ever won the coveted Kentucky Derby.
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Comments (17)
I love the narrative and perspective on this story Heather! You did a great job building tension that lead to an inspiring ending! Great story!
I’m so in love with this! Great story. ❤️🔥
Oh, beautiful narrative! Love the realism and the strong emotional core. Plus, Colors of Silence is a gorgeous name. 💖
The day will come. Either it will happen or the Kentucky Derby will be no more.
Great story
Girl/female power is fueling gir/female power. We sure are getting there. Just watch us go. Great story.
Wonderful story, Heather. It's been too long since I've watched a race.
Bravo! I felt the excitement and the nervousness; the thrill of the race and the victory. I felt the wind on my cheeks and saw the "Colors or Silence"...so well done, my friend! I did not know only 6 female jockeys have won 🥹❤️ The snickers behind her back felt so real; so glad for the glorious ending!
Great story of female determination and victory. It will coke, one day.
Victoryyyyy! Loved your story and the backstory as well!
That was awesome and reminds me to watch the results from Saturday's race on UTube.
Yes! Great concept, I love to watch the Derby, sipping Mint Juleps of course! 🌹
Very informative and a great story 🥰
Love it!
Awww, that was Great!❤️💯📝
Great story Heather. I hope you got it in in the nick of time, you had your own race (with the clock) there!
Yay! Victory! Loved it!