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A Daring Escape

A Microfiction Bank Heist Story

By π‘πŒ π’π­π¨πœπ€π­π¨π§Published 11 months ago β€’ Updated 11 months ago β€’ 1 min read
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β€œTwo minutes,” Bruiser barked with authority. We trusted Bruiser. He knew his onions. β€œStep it up,” he commanded, β€œwe’re running out of time.”

The warbled sound of distant sirens offered an ominous warning. Some people panic under pressure, but never Bruiser. He was cool as a cucumber. Nerves of steel!

β€œA minute fifteen,” he prodded.

β€œI’m in,” announced Tony, swinging the bank vault door open.

β€œGrab what you can,” urged Bruiser. β€œSIXTY SECONDS!”

Stationed out front, armed to the hilt, was the trigger man, a slab of beef known as β€œKnuckles”. As the bank alarm trumpeted, he readied himself.

β€œMake tracks,” declared Bruiser.

Rushing toward the street, adrenaline pumping, I sensed this may not be a clean getaway. A disabled jalopy was strategically positioned in the middle of the road. As was customary with Bruiser’s bank operations, two vehicles awaited us, engines purring and passenger-side doors swung wide open. Dough in hand, we tumbled into the lead vehicle, a heavily-armored 1931 Cadillac Fleetwood, and screamed around the corner.

As we topped Grand Avenue, we heard the echoing rat-a-tat-tat of distant machine gun fire. We swung around the corner at Fifth and slid into the safe haven of our rendezvous point.

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π‘πŒ π’π­π¨πœπ€π­π¨π§

Λœβ€*Β°β€’.Λœβ€*Β°β€’ Time is our most valuable asset. Thank you for spending some of your time with me! β€’Β°*β€Λœ.β€’Β°*β€Λœ

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  • Jay Kantor11 months ago

    Hi Rob - I'm at a loss for words as to where you come up with these visions - amazing from the Bitchin' Caddie intro to the suspense - so don't "enema" me - Hey the reason I sent you to 'Polyester' is that's your Kansas town. J-BuD

  • You hit this one out of the park! I enjoyed it so much! Fancy job! Also, I wish I can be calm under pressure like Bruiser!

  • Jennifer David11 months ago

    Vivid imagery that took us back in time. Love the word choice, very fitting for the time. The pace is set well as well.

  • Real Poetic11 months ago

    β€œAs we topped Grand Avenue, we heard the rat-a-tat-tat of distant machine gun fire.” This ran chills down my spine. Gun fire is a sound no one can forget. Great job!!

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