my better half called me to task
more a masked directive than critique
and as i was about to quietly retort
she wouldn’t even let me speak
finally when i was able to slip in a word or two
i was able to table my twisted views
but only if it was obliquely point formed
and full of commercials like the news
i tried to tell her as best i could
i carefully measured every word
i bring a perverted balance of sorts
sublime, ridiculous and absurd
this is my particular area
of the literary pursuit
i see no one else burning this torch
so this...this is my horn to toot
my subjects are simply the sum of the words
that i have chosen to wield
and to prove I’m not just sitting in a paddock
i am…out standing in my field
this is my particular niche
and whilst confronting depraved and bizarre
there’s honesty in my outrageous elaboration
a simple mirth that i can only stretch so far
anyone can write something nice
bland, safe, boring and superficial
but it leaves a bad taste in your brain
because the sweetness is all artificial
commercially crass cheesy and cheap
i just goes on and on and on and on and on and on
(Spoken to the reader: “you get it don’t you?”)
made in a factory and powered by dumb
the latest mind numbing top 40 drone
another plastic product from don’t-think inc.
another gold record for their wall
there’s nothing nice in any of this
“nope – there’s nothing nice in here at all”
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Brenton F
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Echoes in Silence
In the vast quietude where words fade into the background, life’s most profound truths resonate as echoes in silence. Here, in the untouched calm, the soul speaks without sound, communicating through the vibrations of existence that permeate the stillness. This silent symphony is not void of content but rich with the unvoiced narratives of our inner worlds.
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Comments (8)
Oh yes. The world is not always nice, but we always have something to say. Well done.
This is so well done. I love the way you ended it.
You get it, don't you? Lol, we do! This was so well written! Fantastic poem!
Anything but another Hallmark greeting card. I couldn't agree more over the saccharine so often produced & distributed.
As ever, your poetry is amazing, surprising, hilarious, and pointed. I thought I’d read this one, but maybe I didn’t…anyway, I love it. You pack so much in, I can’t hope to fully dissect every part I liked. But here are a couple that I really appreciated. LOL this bit made me laugh: "i was able to table my twisted views but only if it was obliquely point formed and full of commercials like the news" "made in a factory and powered by dumb" I love this! Your humor is always such a treat, Brenton. Been missing reading new stuff from you. I do agree with you on the sentiment, though. It’s hard to argue in favor of "nice poetry" when the bulk of it is so sickly sweet, or superficial, as you say. I much prefer honest poetry, that has grounding. If it happens to be uplifting, great. But more often, it’s not. Poetry seems to thrive on the more negative side of human emotion, and I don’t mind that. It’s all the more refreshing when a nice poem well written makes itself known. "anyone can write something nice bland, safe, boring and superficial but it leaves a bad taste in your brain because the sweetness is all artificial commercially crass cheesy and cheap" Yup, so true. Side note, the rhyming here is fantastic. And I see your alliteration! Oh and perfect ending, btw; the rhythm is so satisfying.
Love this so much, and it is so very true in a lot of ways. Nice is sometimes overrated and often not genuine!
Whew! What a ride this was. We better bring the cheese to please you. We should have a restart button for everything. This makes me want to push the button.
Positivity doesn’t sell and it is boring. I pursue only perverted places in my full length fictions. The world of my abusers was depraved to the core.