Dear 5:00 a.m.
*
You are the hour
I struggle to wake to
for Somebody told me
that you have the power
to make or break my day.
*
You know who I speak of.
*
They live the hustle
and praise the grind
and tell Everybody that if only
they can meet you
they can truly come alive.
*
Because Somebody was just like me.
*
Poor and purposeless
but filled with dreams and
hidden drive that only
you can reveal
so long as I kept seeing you.
*
And if I refuse?
*
If I would rather sleep
and enjoy that extra hour
of warmth and comfort
instead of building legacies
like Somebody,
*
Then I deserve to be a Nobody.
*
And yet you are the hour
the birds greet
and sing exultantly that they,
though small and weak,
have survived the night.
*
A feat I see you treasure.
*
For you dull
the sun with haze
and slow its rising light
so that every tooth and claw
can stay sleeping.
*
Except the hungry Somebody.
*
Who, in praising your quietude,
forgot the birdsong
that rang
with sweet defiance
outside their window.
*
The same song outside mine.
*
They call me by name
under the safety
of your silence
telling me that they
are still alive
*
And that I,
*
Though poor
and purposeless
and in many ways
small and weak,
should sing with them.
*
For I have triumphed too!
*
Yours truly,
Awake and Alive.
*
*
*
Thank you for lingering.
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Mesmerizing. Earned a new subscriber.
Love this! What I especially like is the nemesis within it. The "somebody" whose presence looms over the hour. Well dome.👍👍
https://vocal.media/poets/a-night-with-nature
https://vocal.media/humans/what-happens-when-people-die
Wonderful, Loryne! I love that you wrote a letter to a that hour of the morning 🤗 "For I have triumphed too!" should be a t-shirt we should all unlock, I think!
Wow Soothing 🤩
Absolutely breathtaking!!!!
I love this poem
I love waking up early but 5am is too early for me. Though I'm already awake at 5am plus, I will snooze until 6.30am. I know snoozing is bad but that's me preparing myself mentally to face the day 😅 Loved your poem! Congratulations on your Top Story!
Oh wow, that was really interesting. I too struggle with waking up at those early hours, but also feel productive when I do, but then also think, why can't I keep sleeping? I like how you tied nature in with all these emotions and elements, great work!
It's very nice.
Oh, this was so lovely, brilliant, and inspirational, Loryne! I love waking up early, but I felt the intense debate someone who love to sleep in might feel. The emotions are expressed so beautifully here. I had so many favorite lines, but I really loved this stanza, "And yet you are the hour the birds greet and sing exultantly that they, though small and weak, have survived the night. Amazing job and congrats on Top Story! Very well-deserved! :)
Your writing is so layered with emotion and imagery. 5am is not my hour, but I did read this earlier today. Congratulations on Top Story!
I second that emotion--though I'm never quite sure I actually did survive.
Wonderful piece. Congrats on the top story
I know it's not what you were going for, but 5am has been unique to me the last 2 days since I've had to wake up at 5 to get my son to school early to take the bus to NY for Model UN. Congratulations on Top Story!
Brilliant & Beautiful!
Brilliant - I thought this was fab!
This is lovely, warm and intelligent.
I know the feeling being up at 5am. That’s why a read on vocal to wake me up . Very relatable 🙂
I really liked this! What a great poem. This flowed so well amazing prose also I’m doomed because of my work schedule my average wake time is 10 am except on the weekends when my five year old starts asking me if I’m getting up at 7am haha which of course I get up
Great poem, Loryne. Very relatable also. Even though I don't have to get up to function in the world at that time, my body still wakes around then. I usually read emails or stories on vocal until I'm ready to go back to sleep for a few more hours. Congrats on a well-structured epistolary.
Congratulations ✨💯🎉💖
Enjoyed this, even with my limited poetry appreciation
Beautifully written! It has some Emily Dickinson vibe in it!