in her shadow
confession from someone invisible
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eyes always went to her first
caught by her powerful feminine charms
looking through me like I didn't exist
it stung, but I never felt envy
proud to call her my sister
standing in her shadow wasn't all that bad
... except for the times it was lonely
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***Disclaimer*** Since Vocal wants transparency in regards to the use of AI-assistant tools, here are the two in my Google extensions: ProWritingAid & QuillBot. Neither wrote my poem for me.
About the Creator
Brin J.
I have a few stories and poems inside me that I want to share. Maybe, if I'm lucky, they'll reach people who'll enjoy them. 📖
Reader insights
Nice work
Very well written. Keep up the good work!
Top insight
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Comments (29)
This is really nice
I have no idea what these tools are, but the poem is excellent.
Back to say congratulations
Sad poetry💔 - Congrats on TS!
so sad and painful... yet positive at the end... congrats on TS!
So happy this received TS!!! Congrats, Brin :)
Congrats on Top Story!
This is such a great interpretation of the prompt. I really connected with the heartache of being lost in a sibling's shadow but still loving them.
fantastic. My sister was too much younger than I was for me to get lost in her shadow ... however .... my brother was two years older and people gravitated to him often leaving me in shadows. I usually felt so lost but even now, I feel even more lost because I don't have my brother to speak with. I miss him more than I miss being in his shadow.
Me putting the pen down after reading this, this is a winner. Great job!
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Ah Brin, I read this before...but for some reason didn't interact. I am bad, that is why....lol. Anyway, what I love about this most is that it is sad, yes, because obviously you'd want some of the attention at least some of the time, as we all do/would...but you don't resent your sister for it. You hold her in high regard...so it's got this real sadness to it, but it's not spiteful either...which makes it quite remarkable really. so deftly written! congrats on it getting Top Story!
Love the subtitle. It sets the stage for the feelings evoked. Congrats, Brin!
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Congratulations on Top Story.
Congratulations on Top Story. Your choice of 1st person gives this piece intensity. Love it.
So raw and riveting! Great acrostic, Brin! And congrats on Top Story!
Congratulations on top story!! Loved it!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
This was heartbreaking and so so beautifully written!! Great work Brin and congrats on Top Story!! Also, I didn't know Vocal was wanting us to tag everything we use for our work... 😬😅 I better get back tracking since I've been using prewriting a lot, thanks to you for the suggestion!!
Congrats on the TS.
I love this so much, and it's got me thinking about a quandary I've never experienced - loving someone but feeling overlooked because of their existence. I have 2 bros but no sister, so I've never felt this. I'm thinking now of my cousins I grew up with. There were 4 girl and I didn't understand why they sometimes didn't want to hang out together. Hmmm. Sorry for the rant. Did I mention I love your poem?
I liked this unique take on a very relatable situation. Not focusing solely on the bad, but not shying away from it either. And the description of lonely making one feel invisible, excellent work!
Enjoyed your work but sad.
That was so sad 🥺 I'm so grateful I've never had to experience this.