The world begins anew.
Breaking the darkness of the night,
Silence through and through,
Weighted down by might,
Heaving in one final breath,
Looking to the East,
Greeting thy ol’ friend Death,
Yearning for release,
Take me from my corporal form,
The man I am no longer,
Sing to me- my course transform,
If I were only stronger.
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Rachael MacDonald
Avid Reader, Sometimes Poet, Occasional Writer, and searcher of truths often lost in the breaths between candy-coated lies.
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I have been taking some time away from writing. I haven't forgotten about Vocal, the truth is I just have been too busy pursuing other things to write online and honestly, my little family and I just had a really hard month between the flu and a weird eye infection/cold circulating our house. I'm currently sipping some warm peppermint tea because my throat is sore.
By Chloe Rose Violet 🌹6 days ago in BookClub
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This makes me think of the end of a day and the beginning of night for some reason. I like the way this flows, and “Weighted down by might” is a powerful line. It’s a heavy and soulful poem. Nicely done! Good luck in the challenge too😊
This told such a beautiful story reflecting the fear of death and the release of rebirth. Reading this on the reverse felt like exhaling a breath I didn't realize I was holding. Beautifully done!
Cleverly done Rachael, truly enjoyed this poem.
Spooky expansive
Oh, that first/last line, I feel like the protagonist MUST be strong enough for this new way of being! Very good.