Call of the Ocean
A Crown Cinquain
The wind
It was blowing
She closed her eyes and felt
How nice it is to feel something
Unseen
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Unseen
Therefore unheard
But the sea had many
Secrets and mysteries untold
Curious
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Curious
She squinted hard
It seemed to her the waves
Were beckoning her to follow
Should she?
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Should she
Follow her heart
And jump into the sea
Or listen to the warning bells
Ringing
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Ringing
In both her ears
Swimming underwater
Kept going deeper till she found
Answers
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A Crown Cinquain is a sequence of five cinquain stanzas functioning to construct a larger poem. The syllabic count for each stanza is 2-4-6-8-2.
The last line of the previous cinquain stanza is repeated as the first line of the next cinquain stanza.
The final line of the last cinquain stanza does not have to equal the first line of the first cinquain stanza, but it is an option.
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Comments (74)
Intriguing! I've never even attempted a cinquain, but I really like what you've done with yours. The ocean drew me in. Mystical ending. Well done!
This one was good. I admire your poetic skills, My Morbid Friend.
This poem has such a rhythmic flow to it, which matches perfectly considering there is so much ocean imagery. “It seemed to her the waves Were beckoning her to follow”. I like the idea of her immersed in watching the water. Nice!
Wow! Best!
Lovely. I was relaxed reading this. Congratulations on Top Story <3 <3
Nice! 😊💕Congratulations on Top Story🎉🎉🎉
💜💜💜💜❤️🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡I think no words can describe so I just let the silent speak ! Congratulations ! one of the most beautiful One and painful one I read ! Big Hug Much Love !
What a fun form! And a tragic poem
That is a really lovely poem, and I am definitely going to have to try out that form, too. Excellent!
Really interested in the form structure of this poem. To a point I'm going to play with it. Thanks Dharrsheena, lovely poem.
I hate that I missed this one! (Especially as much as I love your writing!) This is masterfully written and I LOVE the rhythm of it. Reading it, you can almost feel the movement of the ocean. LOVE this poem!!
I have no idea how I missed this brilliant piece, but thanks to Naomi, it found me today. I'm so glad it did. Beautifully written as always, and thank you for introducing me to another intriguing form.
I love the way you experiment with different poetic forms, and share what you’re doing in your author’s note. I want to attempt this type of poem now. What I loved most about this was my personal interpretation of it. I’m not sure if this was what you had in mind, but I felt like it was a metaphor for consciousness. The ocean is so vast and unknowable, like the depths of the human mind. It can be terrifying to explore, but some of us are lured by that siren song that promises a little more awareness.
Very evocative but simply so which I think is a trait of great poetry. Loved it!
This is beautiful and transporting.
You’re such a talented poet! So beautifully written!
This was beautiful D, I love the formatting and rhythm of the poem. It felt very whimsical, put me in the mood for summer and beach weather. 😊💕
This is really beautiful 😁
Interesting thoughts in this poem.
Now that is beautiful! You're digging deeper here Dharrsheena and coming up with material that feels more vulnerable but also more distilled and affecting. This poem is truly lovely, one of the better pieces I've seen at Vocal!
Very beautiful poem🍃
Creatively crafted poem with lots of visual that gives the feel of the sea.
Stunning imagery.
Superb! I like the sequences of stanzas.
Very interesting and thought provoking. Work well done.