at length evening comes
A Villanelle after visiting my Great-Uncle's grave.
Where landscape steals from steel-cold, frozen, cloud,
A smoky glen, with gentle, noble sheep;
I greet the dead with nods and smiles, aloud.
--
I’ve limped from London, lover-led and proud,
To softer Bluestacks, there our tryst to keep,
Where landscape steals from steel-cold, frozen, cloud.
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Escaping from the life of noise and crowds;
Where living corpses, like the daylight, creep,
I greet the dead with nods and smiles, aloud.
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Old pathways cuts through mountains, heather-browed,
(The music pausing with the sat-nav beep)
Where landscape steals from steel-cold, frozen cloud.
--
Depression lifted like a windswept shroud,
The boneyard just atop a valley deep.
I greet the dead with nods and smiles, aloud.
--
I share the truths our ancients are allowed.
My lover holds me as I proudly weep,
Where landscape steals from steel-cold, frozen, cloud,
I greet the dead with nods and smiles, aloud.
About the Creator
Conor Darrall
Short-stories, poetry and random scribblings. Irish traditional musician, sword student, draoi and strange egg. Bipolar/ADD. Currently querying my novel 'The Forgotten 47' - @conordarrall / www.conordarrall.com
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Nice work
Very well written. Keep up the good work!
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Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Comments (12)
This really is a stunning poem. You captured perfectly and tied it up with a lovely bow.
Vivid imagery. You really took us with you in this poem.
Oh now, oh. This is gorgeous. Beautiful. I felt it bone deep. Your words, alchemical, always thrum a heartbeat rhythm. Congratulations x
Congratulations!
Beautiful, congratulations !
Beautiful imagery created within the confines of just a few words per snapshot. I love this piece!
Both the poem and the photo are brilliant. Congratulations on placing, Connor!
Congrats! What a powerful scene and a masterful villanelle!
Congratulations. There is so much story in this.
This was both very melancholic and emotional. Loved your poem!
That was very emotive. I haven't dared try this challenge, but this may be the best one I've read.
Heartfelt & lovely!!!❤️❤️💕