Around The Sun
Holding up
The distance doesn't feel right
Is this distance really a goodbye?
Holding out
Holding up
Staring at my phone
Hoping your name will pop up
As each day travels around the sun
It's still apparent that you're the only one
I'll say I love you with every breath that fills my lungs
As each day travels around the sun
The distance doesn't feel right
Is this distance really a goodbye?
Shutting down
Shutting up
Wanting to come home
Guess I missed the bus
As each day travels around the sun
It's still apparent that you're the only one
I'll say I love you with every breath that fills my lungs
As each day travels around the sun
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Frankie Martinelli
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This is a beautiful way of using words. I love how you use the sun as a metaphor for feelings, and the emotions in the words you have used are very powerful.
Beautifully written. Emotion bounces off your words.
Very heartfelt. Congratulations on your top story.
Ugh, I felt this to my bones. congrats on the top story, and for pouring a bit out for us to connect with
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Relatable stuff. Well done on T.S 👍
Congrats on your top story
Emanates from deep places of the heart... Let's all say it together, "Authentic!!!"
Great work, Frankie! And congrats on your Top Story!
Great going! Keep up the fantastic effort—congratulations!
Stunning as always. The refrain really adds a poignancy to it. Super congratulations on TS 🤍
❣️ Beautiful Beautiful Beautiful ❣️
It feels like you're stuck in time, while time keeps moving anyway.
I love it!!❤️
Oh, this is just beautiful. Congratulations on Top Story. I'm glad to have read this one today. It filled a little hole with a positivity. (I'm gonna assume that the distance didn't turn out to be a goodbye, after all.) ❤️
Lovely!
Beautifully written!!! Loving it!!!❤️❤️💕 Congratulations on Top Story too!!!
The yearning here was so intense! So poignantly beautiful!
It’s amazing how your muse keep you to your theme ❤️👍🏽