A Fond Flashback
The scent of Childhood
The aroma calls
Strawberry fields and plastic
Ball bathed in static
About the Creator
Allie Bickerton
She / Her - Canada
I spent most of my life immersed in visual arts and I neglected my literacy.
Nurturing harboured emotions and poetic thoughts I’ve stashed within.
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The Burnout Train
This poem was written in response to the Rattle® Poetry Ekphrastic Challenge for April 2024 and was ultimately not selected. You can find more information here. https://www.rattle.com/ekphrastic/ The image that this poem was specifically written about can be found here. (April 2024 – Gerrie Paino's “Night Train”) https://i0.wp.com/www.rattle.com/ekphrasis/EC24Apr.jpg?ssl=1
By Rae Fairchild (MRB)5 days ago in Poets
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I’ve been reading a lot of entries for the TC challenge, and to me this is one of the very best so far. (Funnily enough, I was recently reading a book by Buyng-Chul Han called ‘The scent of time’.) Abstract concepts are discouraged in poetry; with time, it's particularly tempting to invoke Transience, Eternity, or Memory in the abstract; you avoid that trap by focusing on images, details, and the senses. There’s a freshness to the contrasts in your imagery, and the stylistic touches (alliteration, ‘calls’-‘ball’) are a nice flourish. Ideally, the best line should be the last one, and in this one I think it is.