Breathless from running, and struggling to maintain his growing anxiety, he raced toward her home. Best friends since forever, they had shared every major life event like brother and sister, but they weren’t. They had gathered many more of those small things that only had meaning through a shared lifetime. They would always be friends and as her friend, he was once again hurrying to comfort her through her latest drama.
Entering her bedroom, he was stunned to find her sitting demurely on her bed, with her legs crossed but completely naked.
I thought she really knew me.
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Phil Flannery
Damn it, I'm 61 now, which means I'm into my fourth year on Vocal, I have an interesting collection of stories. I love the Challenges and enter, when I can, but this has become a lovely hobby.
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Ray a 30 years old man a drug , alcohol addict , burred under a huge amount of borrows of money . He is the only person in his family . Years ago he is married but his wife Briana died 5 years ago with their unborn child due to cancer this situation made him a addict now he is a pocket picker and do some little heists for living and live in a small cottage . One dark night in a dark street when he is trading drugs from a drug dealer suddenly , A tall , handsome man comes there and start punching the person who is giving drugs to Ray then the drug dealer ran from there . At that moment that person put his arm on Ray’s shoulders and start walking with Ray . Ray is very afraid at that time that he is not able to walk then the person introduce himself as Rustin Ray asked that are you from police? Rustin said no I am not from police . “So where are we going”? Ray asked . “You didn’t tell your name yet” Rustin said. Oh! Sorry I forgot my name is Ray . But can you tell me now that where are we going . Then they both sat down at a bench present on the roadside . Then Rustin asked Ray that what are you doing in that street ? Nothing ! Ray said very suspiciously Rustin said you can tell me the truth I tell you that I am not from police . OK so I am just taking some drugs from that person whom you are beating . OK but why do you take drugs and how do you got money fot that ? Actually I do some little heists like picking someone’s wallet from their pocket to take some drugs. Ok what if I pay you a amount of 100 millions dollars for just playing a game ? “You are joking I knew it you also do some drugs but Hey how are you so fit while you do some drugs do take a special kind of drugs ?” Ray said while making fun of Rustin . Then Rustin said Hey I am serious . “ I know I am a uneducated , addicted , ugly and fool but I am not that fool that if someone told me that I will get a freaking ! 100 million dollars of playing a game and I will believe it” Ray said while laughing continuously . Oh so you are not believing me . “yes and no one believe you if you said this” Ray said. O.K. so if you don’t believe me I am going from here but, if your mood changes and you start believing me this is my card contact me I will tell you about the game and believe I am not joking . “Ok you are not joking” said Ray in sarcasm. Next day when Ray is at a mall to pickpocket a old man but from somewhere suddenly a gangster with his gang from which Ray had taken a large amount of money many time ago comes from somewhere and his gang slide Ray to a small street which is empty till Ray can see. And start threating him to give his money and start punching him and the gangster put a knife on Ray’s neck and threat him to give his money back otherwise he will kidnap him and sell his organs in black market . And that’s enough to scare him. Ray come back to his cottage in nervousness and take out the card which was given to him by Rustin and he call that number which was written in it and a suspicious voice comes from the other side Ray said Yes I am ready to play the game. That voice said O.K. at 1 a.m. tonight come and stand near the lake side and yes remember to come alone there. “Yes I will”. Said Ray .Ray go and stand near the lake at exactly 1 a.m. a person not Rustin wearing Black suit with a bag in his right hand come and stand in front of Ray and ask that you Ray Winslet ?
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The Burnout Train
This poem was written in response to the Rattle® Poetry Ekphrastic Challenge for April 2024 and was ultimately not selected. You can find more information here. https://www.rattle.com/ekphrastic/ The image that this poem was specifically written about can be found here. (April 2024 – Gerrie Paino's “Night Train”) https://i0.wp.com/www.rattle.com/ekphrasis/EC24Apr.jpg?ssl=1
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Wooo, what happen next ? Is there a part 2 ???
Ooh, this is so good! You really got me, I was not expecting that 😅 Love it!
Oh, I love when those last lines drop and change everything. This was fantastic. Great work :)
I thought I had read this, well I have now, and loved the finale
Wow! What a visual ending. 😎
Wow, I like the Wrenching...
Really well done especially the ending
Very good, Phil. I loved the twist.
Good one... Keep going
that was an unexpected twist - both for the story and the boy. Nice work!
Lol, that was unexpected! Brilliant story!